Human Noise



We are such noisy creatures.
Bones pop.
Blood rushes.
Stomachs gurgle.
Lungs exhale / inhale.
In the silent moments,
I can hear your eyelids close.

No wonder my sleeping cat
Wakes when I draw near.

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T
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The audio imagery is quite illustrative. You can almost hear the sounds as you read.

Raeven
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i like the cat Big Grin

Diana
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Wow, what a fun piece. I agree with Raeven, I like the inclusion of the feline. Though now I wonder if my hearing is off - I can't hear eyelids close, heh.

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