Heartbeats



I’d buy your smile
For a dollar.
And no, that’s not much,
But it’s one hundred copper
Heartbeats
That you and I will share
Between now –
The moment we meet
And then –
Your final breath or mine.
And like the coins they represent
Those heartbeat moments will
Shine or not
Will gleam or not
But lusterless or brilliant,
They are ours.
And when they are gone,
I’ll ask your two cents worth
On silly things.
Just to share another pair of heartbeats
With you.

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Raeven
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this is wonderfully conceived - the prevailing imagine is very yes! and the two cents just such a wonderful addition/culmination

and i can taste it. i love poetry i can taste

T
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This one, somehow, gave me goosebumps.

Diana
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Very interesting concept. I like how the phrase "two cents" was thrown in towards the end.

Though I would remove heartbeat from the phrase "heartbeat moments", it seems redundant.

Char
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OK, you need to add bookmarks, Mr. Gadfly. I need to find some of these later. Especially this one.

Gabriel
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Working on it. D5's Bookmarks module is crap.

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