If you were a random house
On a random street
In any given town,
Somewhere in the world,
I would want to be a postcard
Sent from the San Diego Zoo
Delivered accidentally,
Anonymously,
To your front door.
now see, this one has a less random, more personal sentiment to me. my first zoo was the san diego, it's one of the few memories i have of dad being around when i was little. it's truly something (or at least, it was when i was little )
Unique idea, I enjoy the (pardon the pun) randomness of the piece.
I agree that picking the San Diego Zoo is a nice touch, something to make the reader question into hidden meanings.
I wonder if the last few lines wouldn't be improved (the flow is only a little off) by changing it to "Delivered accidentally, / Anonymously, / To your front door."
I wonder if the last few lines wouldn't be improved (the flow is only a little off) by changing it to "Delivered accidentally, / Anonymously, / To your front door."
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Apr 5 2009
The zoo? I'd be the one from the Pez museum
Apr 5 2009
now see, this one has a less random, more personal sentiment to me. my first zoo was the san diego, it's one of the few memories i have of dad being around when i was little. it's truly something (or at least, it was when i was little
)
Apr 9 2009
Unique idea, I enjoy the (pardon the pun) randomness of the piece.
I agree that picking the San Diego Zoo is a nice touch, something to make the reader question into hidden meanings.
I wonder if the last few lines wouldn't be improved (the flow is only a little off) by changing it to "Delivered accidentally, / Anonymously, / To your front door."
Apr 5 2009
hmm, i think i'm inclined to agreed with Diana on this one
Mar 24 2009
Good catch there.
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