Happenstance



If you were a random house
On a random street
In any given town,
Somewhere in the world,
I would want to be a postcard
Sent from the San Diego Zoo
Delivered accidentally,
Anonymously,
To your front door.

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T
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The zoo? I'd be the one from the Pez museum Tongue

Raeven
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now see, this one has a less random, more personal sentiment to me. my first zoo was the san diego, it's one of the few memories i have of dad being around when i was little. it's truly something (or at least, it was when i was little Tongue)

Diana
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Unique idea, I enjoy the (pardon the pun) randomness of the piece.

I agree that picking the San Diego Zoo is a nice touch, something to make the reader question into hidden meanings.

I wonder if the last few lines wouldn't be improved (the flow is only a little off) by changing it to "Delivered accidentally, / Anonymously, / To your front door."

Raeven
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hmm, i think i'm inclined to agreed with Diana on this one

Gabriel
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I wonder if the last few lines wouldn't be improved (the flow is only a little off) by changing it to "Delivered accidentally, / Anonymously, / To your front door."

Good catch there.

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